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PostSubject: a few of my short poems   a few of my short poems I_icon_minitimeWed Dec 02, 2009 12:08 am

Where do you stand?
Where do you stand?
friend or foe?
can i trust you or will you betray me?
Tell me where you stand my love, tell me where you stand hated foe.
Speak your truth and mine i will share, tell me that you hate me
or tell me that you care.
My friend or foe i need to know: where do you stand?

Only Human afterall
From the void of space echoes the remnants of long forgotten memories,
deep within the heart of solitude beats the dream of tomorrow

At the core - you nor i can tell us apart from eachother,
differences and similarities melt into one because in the end we are all of one people
- together we are humankind of one earth

A different christmas carol all year long
Nights grow longer
Days grow colder
Darker, Deeper slumber
the lonely crowd
under the stars,
shout the unspoken words
in silence
we are alone yet
we are together
our hearts kindle the fire
of a peaceful future
- do we act today or did we act yesterday?
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PostSubject: Re: a few of my short poems   a few of my short poems I_icon_minitimeTue Jan 12, 2010 12:40 am

Finally I got to it: I read them Smile

I... hmmm. I liked the 3rd best. I'm no poem expert... At all. But I find the two first poems to be a bit fractured. I don't know how to express it, but I feel the continuity, the flow of the poem hampered by, perhaps, poor choice of words.
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